Jack_Glass Posted February 13, 2014 Share Posted February 13, 2014 I think... therefore i am not a bigot oh my mother was an orangeman,she sang it every daysaid i won't touch anything thats greeni'm true blue all the way my father was the tim of timsloved to sing em irish songsbelted out like sunday hymnsand in public they no more belong well that left me stuck in betweennow sick of colours blue and greenso i opted out of west coast normand at 7yrs old i became a Don. COYR 1 Link to comment
RDU_64 Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Holy fuck, that's bad! Stick to the day job. 2 Link to comment
reekie_dock Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Was you on the meth fan you wrote that?????? 1 Link to comment
Pudgie Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 I liked it. No hard and fast rhythm which sometimes puts me off amateur poetry. In fact, I should probably read more of the stuff. I really liked In Dulce Est by Wilfred Owen in school. That's something else on my to do list. 1 Link to comment
Dandyesque Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Up there with McGonagle Link to comment
Ke1t Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Don't worry, thread! I'll save you! http://youtu.be/9pZ7qmAFltg 13 Link to comment
Henry Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Your mother was an orangeman? 4 Link to comment
Pash Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 I prefer 5 million by Dom Jolly. Good effort though. Link to comment
Bluto10 Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Your no Philip Larkin that's for sure Link to comment
Mikeyboy1903 Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Roses are redViolets are blueCeltic 1 Aberdeen 2 12 Link to comment
Dynamo Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 No offence but shite poem. Hun and Tim centric gets the thumbs down. Link to comment
360 Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Your no Philip Larkin that's for sure No offence but shite poem. Hun and Tim centric gets the thumbs down. The 'rhyming' of "norm" and "don" was a particular low point. Link to comment
zebradentist Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Was you on the meth fan you wrote that??????Location: Port Glasgow Probably something much worse Link to comment
afcwull Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Roses are redViolets are blueCeltic 1 Aberdeen 2 Link to comment
DarylAFC Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 You shouldn't have gone public with this. 1 Link to comment
a1-don Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Norm and Don do not rhyme. Missed a trick with green, Aberdeen and greatest team you've ever seen. Link to comment
StandFree1982 Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Norm and Don do not rhyme. Missed a trick with green, Aberdeen and greatest team you've ever seen.and flick her bean. That could have taken the poem into a whole new realm of possibilities. Link to comment
SkyeDon Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Roses are redViolets are blueCeltic 1 Aberdeen 2 Yes! Link to comment
King Street Loon Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Awful effort. Link to comment
fine-n-dandy Posted February 14, 2014 Share Posted February 14, 2014 Poems are gayThat's what I say Link to comment
Jigot Posted February 16, 2014 Share Posted February 16, 2014 Lennon had a pit bull dogHe called it Tiny TimHe took it to the lavvy to see if it could swimIt sank to the bottomIt floated to the topLennon got excited he grabbed it by the cocktails, champagne two and six a glassIf ye dinnae like it you can stick it up yourAsk nae questions tell nae liesHave you ever seen Dean ShielsWi' two black eyes. Aye, we've got standards to keep doon tae. Ah ken! Link to comment
Jigot Posted February 17, 2014 Share Posted February 17, 2014 Is this for real? Why? Have ye popped a peel? Link to comment
Guest Posted February 18, 2014 Share Posted February 18, 2014 I will never criticise effort. It's better to have tried and failed than never tried at all etc. But this is Aberdeen. The brutality of the truth keeps it real. Glass min. NEVER write a poem or even think about writing a poem ever again. If a poem is coming towards you in the street, make sure you cross to the other side. You thought that that was worth posting on the internet? Are ye wise? Total pish. Link to comment
The Boofon Posted February 18, 2014 Share Posted February 18, 2014 Lennon had a pit bull dogHe called it Tiny TimHe took it to the lavvy to see if it could swimIt sank to the bottomIt floated to the topLennon got excited he grabbed it by the cocktails, champagne two and six a glassIf ye dinnae like it you can stick it up yourAsk nae questions tell nae liesHave you ever seen Dean ShielsWi' two black eyes. Aye, we've got standards to keep doon tae. Ah ken! Ah the good old Tiny Tim the turtle poem bastardised to suit Lennon. I like it. Link to comment
tightbreeks Posted February 18, 2014 Share Posted February 18, 2014 here's a haiku the orange unpeeledthere's nothing to seehollow promises. Link to comment
Jack_Glass Posted February 23, 2014 Author Share Posted February 23, 2014 LOL, amazes me how many folk can't see it's a daft wee tongue n cheek effort from the west coast, it's not meant to be a masterpiece, only took about 2 mins... in 20+ mins i'm fek'n awesome with poetry, fook'n legend if you will, but sadly my best work will never be viewed on a footy forum, just not the right audience... anyway, glad it got the attention, plenty of replies, lots of class comments, now off to cry myself to sleep, critics can be so harsh \m/ Link to comment
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